Wednesday, November 30, 2005

Progress to date

Working Title: Forsaken Realms
Genre: Fantasy/Adventure/ Humour/Fiction/Romance
Chapters completed: Prologue, Chapters 1 to 8

Current Task: Chapter 9, Rewriting on unsatisfactory parts
Chapters in Progress: Chapter 9
% Completed Challenge: 100 %

Word Count to Date: 50,264 words
Days to go: 11

State of Mind: Done! Complete!

The novel has reached its target of 50,000 words on the 19th of November 2005, though it is by no means finished.

I am going to release the entire first 5 or more chapters online for public viewing and the rest will be excerpts. The final reworked Chapters after final edit will not be shown or again published only in excerpts format. This is the only way to prevent wholescale copying of this copyrighted work. To all readers, thank you for your cooperation.

Saturday, November 19, 2005

I'm done! I'm done!

Long weeks of trudging and pulling my hair out I've finally reached the needed word count to qualify for a completion of the NaNoWriMo challenge. To say it is a relief is putting it mildly and I am proud (so vain eh?) to have accomplished this. Yet the work is not over, what was planned as a 31 chapter novel is now only at Chapter 9 and that already only encompass the first few moments of the storyline, if I actually worked at it, the novel could blossom into a trilogy unto itself, (NaNo challenge 2006, 2007 maybe?). I am quite satisfied with the result but a lot of rework and editing has to be done before it can actually be said to be complete, it may never get published but I'm still proud of it. Maybe I'll send the draft to a friend like I promised for his approval and opinion and also in helping edit the draft. Well relaxing a bit for now and taking my time to finalize the novel, much needed break for me. Good luck to all other challengers, the competition is still running and there's still quite a lot of time.

Monday, November 14, 2005

Third weeks go ahead

It's the third week and I've reached 40,000 words. The whole of last week was not too productive. I've actually hit a very serious plot problem and was stuck for quite a while. Certain plots didn't tie in well and during a slump the last few days I produced some writing that I'm not too proud of and thus the last few days have been concentraiting on rewriting a whole large part of the chapter. I've also taken an indepth look at the novel in its entire form as of now and reworked the chapters, seems I've written so much that the previous chapter outline needed to be expanded. A very big problem was concerning a major battle where the remnants of the town's militia and the heroes were making a last stand against the invaders. I couldn't tie in how the invaders would spare the outpost instead of razing everything in sight, another stumbling block involved a scene where my hero Edwin met a new companion who was stuck in jail I thought for days how to get him into prison with good reasons and how to set him to help the said fellow escape incarceration. A lot of plot at this point didn't tie in and I had to reconfigure certain events I wrote and added new twists and details to them to rationalize the story. In the end I depended on one particular character, Sham, Edwin's pet cat that found me ingenious ways to solve a lot of the standing problems in my story. So I've to salute this very fine feline for his help and now I'm back on track again, been growing about 1k of words a day and now its the last 10,000 words stretch. Seems my novel won't end there. If things goes well I'll finish part 1 of my entire story at about 60,000 to 70,000 words with around 12 to 14 chapters. Maybe the continuation of the story will be another attempt for next year's nano, or maybe I'll be enamored to the characters so much that I will trudge ahead and write on. But I'm confident I'll make the 50,000 word mark before the end of next week. Gambate!

Thursday, November 10, 2005

Rest of Chapter 2

“She’s lovely isn’t she?” Prat let off as both we’re descending down the hill along the dirt path. “I mean she must be the most popular girl in town, who’d thought she turned out a beauty seeing how his pappy looked and her mum isn’t really the dawn blossom type.” He let Aria’s face hang in his mind, the sharp angle of her cheeks, high eyebrows, tiny lips and her overflowing golden hair, as he placed a hand over Edwin. “Bet you all the boys are already eyeing to ask her out for the Spring Festival.”

“Knock it off! No need to say such things about her parents, Thadeus was in the army and from the battles he fought, the scars he obtained might not be pretty, yet they are still badges of honour for a veteran like him. I heard he led the charge at Bretling Pass, even as the Draconians outnumbered them by more than half and he and the few survivors of his company held the Pass until the Lord Protector could send in reinforcements. All would have been lost if the battle had gone any other way,” Edwin flicked his pal’s hand off, more angry at his friend for the truthful fact he told about Aria having many admirers, knowing Edwin too wanted so much to ask her himself but couldn’t really pluck up the courage to do so, than at his tasteless joking about her parents’ looks. “Also Aria’s mother isn’t so bad in looks, she’s pretty comely for someone that works the forge with her husband, casting molten ore and shaping the cart wheels and shod iron shoes for the horses.”

“So, are you asking her to the Festival?” Prat said, knowing what Ed’s reply would be because they had this conversation so many times that his responses were no longer a mystery to him. If needed and if anyone asks, Prat could practically recite the exact response in verbatim.

Edwin’s looks grew a bit down and the sliver of a frown started to form, but he quickly banished it and gave a smile to Prat. “Me? Why I’m just a poor farm boy. How can I compare to the townies who could present her with fresh cut flowers, sweets from Mr. Schwattz’s Sweet Shoppie or gifts of gems and perfumed scent bought from the exotic traders. I’m sure Aria wouldn’t even bat an eye towards me, with all the others all lining up to ask her out, forget it okay, I’m fine,” Edwin said, trying to sound convincing more for himself than to persuade Prat. “Besides, I’m not keen to go to the Festival this year with all the new planting of the crops, I’d be too busy to make it, else I’d drop off in the middle from sheer exhaustion.” He made his walking pace a bit faster, trying both to keep Prat from spouting more jibes on the matter but also because secretly he wanted to reach the market faster, in the hopes of catching sight of Aria at her stall.

Before Prat could reply anything, for he needed to sprint a bit to catch up with Edwin, who had walked a fair bit of a distance in his haste, Edwin came about the town entrance. The Moon Gate marks the entrance into T’san, a huge construct of oak carved with intricate designs. Everyone passing through and wanting to enter or leave the town of T’san had to pass through the gate as it was the only entrance available, no matter where they came from. Twin pillars extended upward, the base firmly rooted deep into the ground, each pillar is carved with verses in a language no one knew about, most probably a native tongue of the traveling priests who took refuge here long ago due to war in their lands and erected the gate in the name of the Gods and as a token of friendship to the town that accepted and gave safe haven to them.

Glancing up to the whole 10 feet, both pillars thinned out and bent inwards to form an archway resembling a semicircular moon, hence the name. Carved figurines of mythical beasts adorn the wooden panels and roofing. At the base stood guard two beasts of which no one could point out their origin or a real world counterpart, massive scaled draconic beings with elongated snouts, horned heads, swirling tail and hooves on their extremities. No one in the town, not even the Elder who had lived many lifetimes more than most, knew what they were, most wrote it off as artistic fancy by the sculptor for even in the Yenla, dragons were last seen eons ago and given up for dead, remaining only in legends and tales told to children to entertain them.

Edwin always stopped to look at the Moon Gate, now merely a figurehead for the town, nothing more, its makers long ago made their way from this world. In his haste today and in his anger, he found himself standing in front of it and for a moment mesmerized at the intricate words, though they made no sense to him, he put his hands on them and felt the engravings, each pit and fold caressing his hands and he felt a comfort flowing over him and was almost lost in them. Edwin can’t really say why but it felt like meeting an old friend, someone you knew well and just only got reacquainted again after a long spell of being apart. Each time he touched the smoothened red pillars, it always seem that he was on a verge of remembering something, a tingling feeling at the edge of the brain, like recalling a dream, knowing you had dreamt it the previous night but can’t fully recall the details, just a muddle of colours, images and emotions.

“Hey, you all right Ed?” a worried look sneaked up onto Prat’s face as he finally caught up with Edwin. “You’re not feeling all wrong in the head from the knock are you?” Beads of sweat started to snake their way down his cheeks and he let off pants of heavy breath from the exertion of the chase. “Or are you still mad about me chiding you on Aria? If so I apologize, it’s a mean thing to say though I still think all this hesitating about revealing your true feelings for her is not right,” he said while putting a hand on Edwin’s shoulder and giving him a shake.

As sudden as his near charmed state, Edwin snapped back to reality.

“Eh, why are you trying to do? Snap my neck in two?” he glared.

“What? You were like in another world and all I did was to try and get your attention.” Prat’s face changed from the worried look he had a moment ago back to his normal indifferent composure. “Seriously what’s so interesting about the Moon Gate anyway, we pass here almost every other day and it’s still the same old thing. The stone sculptures though are another thing, they give me the shivers now and then, I’m always reminded of the time when I was 5 years of age and my brother made fun of me by saying that they’ll leap up and chomp my head off when I walk near them, what a stinker.” He went to one and raped his knuckles on the stone head and nothing came about it. “See nothing special, just plain old stone.”

“Nothing, just that it fascinates me that’s all and a bit of skill craft was put into the making of it, nothing like it elsewhere in the entire town, as if it was plucked and deposited here, only everyone forgot why,” Edwin said, eyes still fixated at the gateway and its silent guardians. “Anyway, let’s go, Market Street is just up ahead and I can see a crowd already forming.

Shrugging his shoulder, Prat soon followed Edwin, “Wait up, one minute you’re out of it and now you’re moving like a viper on hot sand.”


“You’re going to be the death of me one day,” he said in jest.




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Second week blues

It's been a slow week to say the least, with work started after the holidays and several other problems off work has caused a much regreted slowdown in writing. It's a bit frustrating when you're fresh and your mind churning out ideas and motivation and you're stuck in the room without a computer. I resorted to writing excerpts of anything I've taken a fancy to using the old ways, paper and pencil. Even with that done coming home doesn't exactly give much time to write, after a hard day slogging at work and then accompanying dinner and time spent with friends and Laura, its usually midnight when I'm back home, pooped out and mentally tired.

Today I finally managed to get some worthwhile writing and am quite pleased with the result. I've written around 2,000 words plus a day for the past few days but reading back I'm not too satisfied at what I wrote out and on better days I've to go back and review the previous two chapters to bring it up to quality. It really doesn't pay to write when you're worn out, half the thing you write turns out as garbage and you spend even more time later correcting your own mess.

I'm okay with the current progress, I well near 30,000 words and with the weekends coming I'm yearning to make up for loss time during these weekdays. It's starting to seem like my story won't reach a conclusion even when hitting the target of 50,000 words. I'm already at Chapter 8 (which seem to grow and grow from what I've originally planned) and my story barely scratched the surface. Seems like to get the novel that I want it might take double that amount of words to achieve (I've planned 36 chapters, so you do the maths). Well good luck to all other nano writers, signing out now.

Sunday, November 06, 2005

Second Chapter online!

Chapter 2: T’san, the town by the ford

The town of T’san almost didn’t make it as a town, in reality it started off as a trading post between the various routes connecting the major cities in the continent, bringing precious commodities of spices, animal pelts, precious gems from Kel in the far west and food produce, finished goods, dyes and timber from the great forests of T’zzl and cities of Branstock, Kneth’ and Squall Port in the south and east. Thus serving as a stopover to replenish and sale of wares being ported along the traffic, settlements soon sprung about, for the placement of the location by the great river and its fertile soil offer an easy route for barges as well as great crop lands to settle and earn the coins of commerce.

From the various settlements scattered about, businesses soon sprouted to cater to the influx of migrants and traders; taverns opened to quench the thirst of those inclined to intoxicating drinks, inns set up shop for those wishing paid lodging, shops and services gave needed commodities for supplies replenishment and even the seedier side of life, the gambling halls and night harlots were soon advertising for customers. Soon all converged at what is now called T’san ford and so the town got its name and soon the traders who found this a comfortable place to put down their roots and soon made it a permanent settlement. The founding families, trade guilders all soon established rule and reined in the more notorious elements making it a good enough place for raising families.

T’san does not exude the crowdedness and hectic happenings of greater cities in the Realm but the roads and alleyways are still crowded with merchants, shopkeepers, residents, passersby and visitors. No great towers loom over the horizon unlike those sprouting like needles from the ground in Q’santhil, City of the Learnt or smelly, cramped and smoke laden as the streets of Cambrion. No it was just nice, from the hill that Edwin and Prat stood after walking past the lightly wooded stretch of forest fringing the town, they commanded a view of the valley; below by the bend of the river nestled T’san, the barges, large constructs of wood laden with goods, were berthed by the pier and workmen were seen loading and unloading crates and bales ready to head off to the various regions of the Realm. Caravans were seen moving slowly from the distant mountain pass, beasts laden with goods and their handlers looking cheerfully at the prospects of food and a bed for the night after the long journey.

Thatched houses, none taller then two flight of stairway huddled close to its neighbours. The streets crisscrossing here and there, delineating the various districts; the market lane with colourful stalls were crawling with people, looking link an ant’s nest from where they stood, smoke billowing in huge streams from the forges of the blacksmiths, Harbor Way connecting the warehouse district to the pier, shouts were heard even at where they stood as the guards from the garrison in their shiny armor practiced their drills. The Realm has not seen much a war for a long time besides the odd skirmish with the goblinoids from the mountains and most of them were basically hired out as caravan guards in case of the odd bandit raids. To the far north, across the river, lay the rice fields, barren now but once the crops are planted and ripe gives off a hue akin to a sea of molten gold, nourished by the river and rich alluvial soil that the yearly floods bring. All in all it was a typical town-busy, bustling and alive.

Edwin and Prat didn’t really notice all these as they have seen the panorama so often that they didn’t really think much about it, though any newcomers viewing it for the first time would stop for a moment to admire the sight. At that moment the pair were busy talking their heads off, mostly of Prat chiding Edwin about his lack out courage in getting to know Aria better, since it was so obvious to Prat that his pal was infatuated with the gal, the blacksmith’s daughter, which can be normally seen at her mother’s stall selling utensils in Market Street by the butcher. Thus it does not surprise Prat that Edwin would often volunteer without fuss to fetch the weekly groceries, though his sister often puzzled at this fact, because Edwin hasn’t really shown any real inclination to the other chores left in his charge.

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Saturday, November 05, 2005

Character list to date

Main story characters

Edwin Sedgewise : Main character and hero material. Edwin is a 14 year old boy living with his sister at the farm they inherited from their parents who died in the plague. Normal boy with no outstanding qualities (as of yet) who fancies a particular gal yet, a daydreamer who often wishes for adventure and to do great things in life.

Marista Sedgewise : Sister of Edwin, the only real relation left for him and often takes the responsibilities to provide for them and to take care of Edwin’s upbringing. Great cook.

Pratley Scale’nte : Edwin’s friend, often called Prat for short. Basically knew Ed since they were tots and have formed a close friendship, though often not too smooth as teenage boys is involved. A bit brash and a little on the prankster side. Whereas Edwin is more withdrawn, Prat can be a little hard to shut up. Being from a large family, often seen alone in town with very few friends besides Ed.

Aria Turnbolt : Daughter of Thadeus Turnbolt, a girl of 16 and the town’s most sought after beauty. Dark long hair, beautiful complexion. Helps mans her mother’s stall selling steelwares and items from parent's forge.

The Cloaked One: Mysterious being with very little known about it for now. Importance can be seen from the way lower minions defer to it and also vast power from the way he exercises it. Central part in ritual hints at his affiliations as well as importance. Often seen as a cloaked being. One of the Triumvirate.

Mentioned in story

Brother Manicrux: Scribe for the Order of the Sacred Groove, introduced as the author of the manuscript detailing the prologue, by most accounts ancient and highly placed in the Order’s hierarchy.

Skull Smasher: Giant pirate overlord with his enchanted hammer, Skull Smasher. Real name unknown and often called by the hammer’s designation. Appears in dream sequence of the story fighting against Edwin.

Thadeus Turnbolt: Former military general that retired to blacksmithing. His right arm was lost in a fight and he re-forged a metal arm piece to replace it with the help of several powerful magicians. Leads a simple life and does not wish for anything more. Family consists of wife who helps him out at the forge and daughter, Aria.

Sham: Edwin's family cat, calico fur, likes fish.

Mikhalel: Demonic being, one of the Triumvirate. Twin horns sprouting from the side of head and carved with arcane symbols, various other smaller pikes protruded from various points on red tattooed face.

G'larial: A lithe woman with emerald green skin and long streaming hair, another member of the Triumvirate. Called Doom Shadow because her real appearance is that of a shadow aspect, twin red eyes visible from the blackest of void.

Day 4: Second day of Raya

Woke up late, felt lazy and slept back till noon. Since today is the second day of Raya, shops closed so Laura and I decided to cook in. Today as well my supervisor is returning back from his trip for the Phycology Symposium in Bangkok with 3 of my lab mates. So happens that today is his birthday as well so his wife and the rest of us planned a surprise birthday party to celebrate him coming back. Reaching there we had to wait since his flight is late in the evening, no one called ahead so we just waited not knowing when they would show up or if their plane is even delayed. Nice dinner, they cattered in with Indian food and there was a lovely blueberry cheese cake they got from Hyatt. Spent the last few days photoshopping his gift, a picture taken of our whole lab except for the missing Johleen, hence the photoshop touch up.
Lots to do and a sudden dearth if no inspiration to continue the novel led me to only begin Chapter 4 late in the night when I felt more up to it, a bit slow in the progress but my target of at least 1 chapter per day is still on schedule. Can't keep eyes open so going to drop off for the night.

Thursday, November 03, 2005

Day 3: Wow 4 thousand words in a day

Personal best today, got an early start and inspiration to write, went on to the third Chapter and finished it! Must be due to the fact that today was a slow day with little distractions and also that the chapter deals with one of the central concepts that is integral to the whole novel and also for the fact that I’ve spent months trying to visualize it. Lots of sadistic stuff (hey sue the characters in the plot, don’t shoot the author can’t help if there’s a bunch of death cult worshipper of an evil god wanting sacrifices) I must admit from my own fertile imagination inspired from all those gross PS2 scare and shoot-em-up games not to mention from the works of Clive Barker. Well here’s a tentative Forsaken Realms Novel chapter list, subject to changes in future:

Prologue
Chapter 1: Humble beginnings
Chapter 2: T’san the town by the ford
Chapter 3: Forbidden rituals
Chapter 4: Rain of fire
Chapter 5: Strange Alliance
Chapter 6: Through the veil
Chapter 7: The meeting at the glade
Chapter 8: In the company of gems
Chapter 9: Prophecies and revelations
Chapter 10: An unexpected turning
Chapter 11: A Bond of honour
Chapter 12: Flight to Haven
Chapter 13: A call to council
Chapter 14: The Bound Book
Chapter 15: Chasing a legend
Chapter 16: An unexpected meeting
Chapter 17: Lady of dreams
Chapter 18: The forgotten lord
Chapter 19: City in the sand
Chapter 20: Dream states
Chapter 21: Betrayal and failures
Chapter 22: Rebuilding of the Order
Chapter 23: The calm before the storm
Chapter 24: Challenged loyalties
Chapter 25: Sword and blood
Chapter 26: The final shackle
Chapter 27: Betrayal of blood
Chapter 28: Sibling rivalry
Chapter 29: The face of evil
Chapter 30: Thera’s gift
Chapter 31: Victory and mourning
Chapter 32: The crowning of the king
Epilogue

Yeah a bit long but I hope to shorten it and trim where necessary, it’s sure to surpass 50,000 words if left to its own defense and I don’t think I can finish it the way I want it in the time frame of a month if I don’t cut it short.



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Chapter 1: Part 3

The spring weather was fine, a cool breeze swept through the plains and the trees were already draped in their new leaves after laying barren through the harsh winter months. Edwin splashed the frigid water all over his body, reeling as the ice cold stung but also jarring him awake. Their abode was a humble one, a meager cottage of thatch and mud bricks on their own acre of farmland left to them by their parents. It has been hard, after the plaque claimed both, Marista was the only one he had left that saw to their needs, though there was a distant uncle that sometimes appear to provide them with the essentials. Edwin contemplated this, it was a long time and he was only a little lad back then but he remembered crying out tears when they were buried by the large oak tree near to their farm plot, but they learnt to accept it over time and now life wasn’t easy but they were making do.

Wiping off the last of the water from his body, he put on his tunic and pants and started walking across the paved walkway that leads from their cottage to the outer gates marking the extant of their holdings. As he walked he was working out in his head the work needed to be carried out before the spring rains gather; the frozen soil needed to be ploughed to make way for the new crops, the winter wheat had been stored in the silo and the sheaves needed to be baled for hay and he will have to clear the vegetable plot so Marista can grow the daily greens of spuds, tomatoes, carrots, cabbages and the herbs for their meals, no more corn gruel, Edwin already was growing tired of the mush fro eating it the entire winter along with pickled produce.

Thunk!

Edwin winched and his hand instinctively went to the sore spot at the back of his head. He winched and turned to stare at the culprit, and before their eyes even met he knew it must be Pratley, and his guess was proven true when he was the smiling face of the lad near his age atop the stone wall.

“Hey aren’t you glad to see me?” he jibed. “Or was your mind thinking of Aida again?”

Edwin bent low to grab a fair size rock and let fly at Pratley, but he dodged it easily enough. “Getting slow, how would thy fair maiden think of you, when you can’t even fell a foe in battle, Ed,” Pratley said.

Thunk! The disappearing form of Pratley was soon gone as he tumbled down the wall.

“Nice one,” Prat groaned while massaging his head that appeared from behind the wall.

“Always have a backup ready for the likes of confident fools like you, Prat,” smiled Edwin.

“Truce then, I think this is going to form a bump, you stinker,” exclaimed Prat.

“Serves you right, you started it, so how come you’re out here?” Edwin asked. “My old man been drinking and came up all ranting and drunk last night, figured he’ll be a bloody crank throughout the day so I think I’d come over and see what you’re up to,” replied Prat.

“Just heading to the market for the groceries, you’re welcomed to tag along, but no more sneaky throws you lout, okay?” said Ed.

“Okay, okay! I know when I’m beat, it’d be more fun than just sitting here,” Prat said. “Maybe we can sneak a look at Aria while we’re at it eh?” At that Edwin slouched a little and a fair colour can be seen on his cheeks.
“Come on then, don’t want everyone to steal all the good bits before we get there,” he said and quicken his pace along the road leading to the town of T’san.




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